Hey guys hwz this ?? honest opinions pls.....!!....?

It is a rare combination- I wish it were rarer- of good theme and bad poetry. Good 'cos it contains personal impressions that have universal applicability: bad 'cos the poet jumps from one metrical pattern to another. The poem is rather prosaic, and the theme, pretty impressive- commonplace though- could have been expressed in the proper medium- prose, that is.